A Serious Talk

[Kris_K]

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[Dude]

It has good flow, and I can almost follow the idea behind it, but it seems to be a very personal piece and while it makes perfect sense to you, to the eye of the reader, particularly one like me who doesn't know you and the personal home life you have, it is a little broken up, or puzzled. I see a lot of what you write in how you feel, I think, or vice versa. It relates perfectly to your emotions, and it gives one a feeling of wanting to know more. Not at all badly written, but in order for it to reach others, I think it needs a little more rounding to make it more comprehendable for the average Joe. Is your daughters name January? If so I'm liking that name. Must be the joy of your life.

I hope you're not bothered by my wanting to critique your works. I've been into writing for many years and was told by two teachers (creative writing and technical writing professors) early on that I had a sort of gift in that area, so it gave me this big headed picture of myself as a writer, which if anything is still at the amateur level. So I feel this intense urge to critique, and give approval when I see good stuff. You have an excellent connection to the emotive sense of writing and that can develop into something really great for you if you pusue it. Poetry and prose... keep it going my friend. Getting it out can also be an immense help for a man (or woman) to keep the emotions in good alignment with your daily life. So write, write, write. You have a lot to say, a lot to get out of you for you and everyone else to see. I highly recommend you pursue this talent all the way through life.

[Kris_K]

Thanks, Joris...


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[Dude]

Very good. Yes, pursue publishing. May dad wrote a bunch of books and when I was a kid he and my mom started their own publishing company right out of our house to be able to get a bunch of his works published. But he never followed through in marketing the books, so when I finally get settled into my own place I plan to spend a lot of time and effort to edit a few of his better works and get them out there to the public. But I also have wanted very much to complete my own first book, which I started a couple of years ago. So, not really knowing how much longer I have in this life, I think I may just do mine first and then tackle the huge mountain of manuscripts he left behind. If anything I write ever sells I want to have something my son can benefit from when I've gone, in the form of royalties.

[Kris_K]

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[Mimi63]

Hi Kris -

I like it.  Maybe you could give a sense, a clue, to what the talk's about.

I remember you.  Aren't you a teacher?  How are you doing?

Mimi

[maura]

I like not knowing exactly what the talk is about.  I can then apply it to myself and the so many "un talks"  I have had in my life time...

I think you sound more like a songwriter than a teacher.  Enjoy your writings very much


Thanks

maura   

[Kris_K]

Mimi, yes... a college English instructor (lit, comp & writing)... My interest in writing is what made me want to go to school. But I have not written now in almost ten years... Kind of like a cook--last thing they want to do is go home and make dinner.... I am hoping to warm up and write my way through TX--but I kid myself sometimes too...

I am doing OK... How are you? I have fatigue a lot, and soreness in the area of my liver almost always... I am going to start TX in June, right after school and a much needed vacation to So Cal... June 26th... I am dreading it, but I need to take a shot at it... I am apprehensive for so many reasons... my liver was a stage 3 last June and I am genotype 1... I have about a 35% chance of success according to my doc... but she said those odds go up to 70% if I get a 2 log drop in 12 weeks... I hope you really wanted to know...

Maura, funny.. I studied classical guitar first in the early 80s... and have played in bands (and with serious friends) on and off since about 1977... way back then it was song lyrics that fueled my desire for writing...

I am glad you all like the poems; as Joris noted, I probably post them in here way too early... before I would ever consider them finished--and sometimes even before I would read them to my family--claerly, they are rough around the edges at times ...

but some days, so am I... ":O}

[robin]

You should consider keeping a journal...easily done...write at your own pace...leave a bit of yourself for the next generation. I enjoyed the poem...kind of reminded me of some old John Prine songs and I agree...I like to "imagine" what the talk was about...can think of so many I should have had or need to have. Keep your spirits high...robin   

[Kris_K]

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[maura]

A Serious Talk

Well, this is the version I submitted... along with some other poems... maybe I will post some of them later too... they really don't have anything to do with Hep C though.... just life...

Kris

LOVE IT !!   I think Hep C has everything to do with "just life" for me now.  So post away.  I can't wait to read some of the others! 

 

[Mimi63]

Hi Kris -

I like the final version.  I'm glad you're writing - it helps.  It's finding your voice again. 

I bet you've been tired!  Hep C, a new baby, teaching.  You seem very clear in your decision to do the treatment.  I hope it goes really well for you.  You like your doctor?

I'm fine, holding steady, get tired sometimes.  My big hepc adventure was nearly poisoning myself with Chinese herbs last winter - an allergic reaction, apparently, but that's long over with.

It's good to hear your voice again.

Mimi

[Dude]

Hey Kris, great stuff. There was a time or two in my life where writing became a sort of release for me, a way to connect to my subconscious and see what's really going on in there. It has always helped me tap into the hidden thoughts, the lost words that never could find their way to the surface in any way other than writing.

One thing I wanted to mention is this, I have genotype 1 (a or b) and in 2001 I had my biopsy and it told me that I was at grade 3 and stage 3 for inflammation and fibrosis. So, I'm right there with you, brother. But I pursued treatments, failed the first time around, and won the second go 'round. I've been undetectable for two years now, brother, so if I can do it, you can, too. And, using me as your benchmark, you can eliminate the first round (I was taking regular Interferon with Rebetol caps), and just go straight to the one that worked for me, the Pegintron and Rebetol (by Scherring Plough). Or you could opt for the Roche brand, Pegasys and Co-whatever-it-is. I say go to SoCal. And no dread, unless you're talking about your hair. Yes, go have a blast. Don't allow this to become a death nell for you, live and enjoy yourself. Use moderation in everything, eat right, drink that water, but by all means, LIVE!

Then write all about it and let us read more of your stuff. This could be wonderful therapy for you, and may just draw some more deep and meaningful stuff from the soul.

[DjTurtle]

I will have to say that writing has been a great outlet for me all my life. I have always written in journals. I have them from when i was a kid onward. I rarely reread them. Strange. It was the putting down of my thoughts that helped me to calm down and look at things in a better frame of mind. During my marriage, which was abusive, I would write notes to my husband but rarely give them to him. It helped me vent without any bad reaction from him. But mostly I use my journal writing now to put down good thoughts. I love life and try to express that in word. Someday I may share some writing. I would love to try a book someday. I better get moving on that! LOL.. will be a half century old next month!!!! I guess it is 50 years of much learned and now to apply it to my life?! He he!

Everyone should find a creative vent,
DjTurtle aka Dawn


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[Kris_K]

Thanks everyone, I REALLY needed to hear this right now... and to have the support...  I head to the Hep doc in a few minutes to get my ducks in a row for June TX... apprehensive, to say the least...